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Rewriting My BEST Oldest Story

SOoOo, I’m rewriting my best, oldest story! Read that post here, or read it here (If you’re too lazy ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š):

Talking Animals

Once l went to a zoo. There, l met a lion who asked me “What is your name?” l was shocked! I have never seen an animal talking to me. I didnโ€™t say my name. I just ran away.

Then , I met a tiger. The tiger asked me, “where do you live?” I ran again , but faster than before . Then I met a monkey. Before the monkey could say anything , I was out of the zoo.

Then my mother woke me up, “School time!”. Then , I understood that it was a dream.


The reason why I consider it as my best, oldest story is because it got on our school magazine and is often described as “Short and simple”

And, also, FYI, I wrote this 4 years ago, when I was 7.

OKAYYY! i’m done blabbering, Here’s the rewritten one:

A VERY UNNATURAL ZOO

One day, I went to a zoo. The place was wonderful and I was enjoying myself, that was until I went to watch the lions. There, I met a lion who surprised me; he asked, “What is your name, darlin’?”

I was so shocked that I couldn’t utter a word! This was crazy! I ran for a few minutes and stopped when I reached near the tigers.

A tiger looked at me curiously and asked me another question,

“Where do you live, kid?”

I panicked. And, because I panicked I ran faster than before. And breathlessly, I stopped near the monkeys.

“Uh-oh. Don’t tell me you’re gonna say something!” I said.

The monkey opened his mouth to say something, but as if some sort of force had pushed me, I had flown out of the zoo.

“Oh god! You’re late again! Hup-hup! Let’s go!” someone screeched.

I woke up to see my mom’s face. “Ah…” I thought, “It was a dream..”

THE END…! I may do a part 2…except in the part 2, the story would be REAL, not a dream. Want me to do a part 2? Let me know in the comments!

Did yeh like me recreation?

I’m concluding here.

Bye

Peace Out ๐Ÿ˜Ž๐Ÿ˜Ž

๐Ÿ›๐Ÿฅ„ ๐Ÿ˜‹

(translation: Gotta go and eat dinner!)

edit: sheesh. I have 13 spam messages D:

Author:

Hullo! I'm Amelia, but you can call me Aamy! I'm an extroverted tomboy who *loves* Attack On Titan โœŠ I'm good at lots of things (Maybe coz I'm epic ๐Ÿ˜‚โœŠ), like, Swimming, Football, Karate, painting, writing, gaming, etc, etc. Now, check out my blog (Because I dunno what else to say, so bye)

10 thoughts on “Rewriting My BEST Oldest Story

  1. This was very interesting. I’ve never read a story like this. Please do the part two!!!!!

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  2. What a fun story! As a writer myself, though, Iโ€™d have to say that I prefer the original. The simplicity is what makes it endearing, in my opinion. But both are good renditions of a fun idea; good job!โœจ

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